taekwondo master

💛 Taekwondo master

this book is about a boy who does Taekwondo

I didn't like it because there were to many words. i would not recommend this to my friends because it isn't interesting 

The Bag On The Desk.

 The Bag On The Desk.

It was a normal day at school and the class was all white it was a private school. It had black carpeted walls with fluffy rugs. Then the teacher put 

their bag on the desk. The paper bag was paper and light brown. Then the teacher left to go get a coffee. As she left it started to wriggle, there were big wriggles and little wriggles .

 Then suddenly a rat came running out. It was running around squeaking and squealing. Then Kaila and Ollie were really weird people. Running and screaming and then it died Because they killed it. Kaila was really sad. 

THE END

Great job Bobbi next time use different types of punctuation .nice job from Caleb

Good words you have chosen to add detail to your writing. I like the use of different sentence starters in your story. Next time you need to write more so that you have a longer story to add more suspense. 

The fox at school

 THE FOX AT SCHOOL 

One very snowy day there was a school on the hill. It was freezing but it was lunch so everyone was outside. suddenly it went dead silent and there was a big scream” fox!”(There was a white and brown fox). Then everybody was running everywhere. yelling” fox, fox, fox,”.

but no matter how far they ran the fox would follow them around and around. they would run into the bush and up trees but the fox would follow. suddenly the fox said something the kids were surprised and thought that they were hallucinating about things. so they started thinking and thinking about things to do(while they were in the trees and bush) so then they turned to the fox and said” what do you want from us”.and surprisingly the fox talked back and said” you are my only hope”.” what do you mean” they repealed. The fox said that he lost his family and he is too young to live without them.” how can we trust you?” they said with suspicion. you can’t really but I hope you can help me then the fox did the puppy eyes and they were sold so they took the fox into the bush and helped him find his family. THE END.

Kylahs feedback:i think this was really cool and interesting.

MY NASA WRITING

 Ratu 30th march

One day there was a space crew that was going to Ariel for a study  trip. The crew that is going to space is me at the age of 20, Danny at 21, Jeff 69, and last but not definitely not least Sheila the rocket ship that they are going to take to space she also 100 years old.

 

Yay they finally arrived to uranus to fill up the tank with fuel then they had lunch then off they went to aerial.once they got to ariel they had to explore of the moon ariel they gotsome samples then went to sheila to go home but then but then they realized did jeff even  fill up the tank with fuel “wait”danny said “jeff didn't fill it up you were supposed to bobbi”.”oh no we can’t go anywhere”!”Well we can go home but… we will have to risk someone and then everyone looked at jeff.then danny pointed at the other end of the moon there was a cow just flying around the moon how is there.”how is there a cow on the moon”I thought to my self.It’s physically impossible but who cares we can get home.then danny had an idea that we could send jeff on the cow to get gas and risk jeff dying or stay together and die together in a month or so.but nobody cared about jeff so they sent him.they reason the reason that nobody likes jeff is because he is because he is 69 years old.they send him away to earth they do end up getting gas but then they find out that sadly find out that jeff died from entering the earth's atmosphere 

Sadly they buried him on mars with the aliens that jeff friends with they were happy to bury him because nobody liked him.

THE END 

 

ALL ABOUT MEEE

All About Me 

I love basketball and all sports. This is me and my team training for a maori competition in Rotorua. We placed 7th out of about 50 or so in under 11 teams. 

I enjoy basketball as it is a contact sport and can be aggressive.

math quiz

Maths Quiz

this is what i did for my quiz